Another 55er.. Hope this one makes the cut
They met on a train to the garden city
Random strangers on a common journey
Mesmerized was he, she was uncommonly pretty
The introductions were wary, the smiles genuine but shy
The conversation engaging, time flew by
When they got down, he helped her down the steps
He didn’t let go, she hasn’t complained yet.
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Marie from http://kvennarad.wordpress.com/ thinks the narrative elements were missing from the previous one here.
This one should fix that I hope.
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Posted on February 5, 2012, in 55er, Awesome, love, poetry, scrriblings, thoughts and tagged 55er, love, meeting on a train, train. Bookmark the permalink. 10 Comments.
Oh lovely! The narrative element IS very much there, and, to answer my own question on the previous comment, who says prose cannot be poetry?
So so so loved the ending!
Wheres the Red ink ?
Thank you. Prose cannot be poetry ? (This is where you confuse the poor kids )
But yeah it somehow came together beautifully
Lol. Prose can be poetry. Read the question again carefully. I specialize in rhetorical questions in the negative
” Rhetorical questions in the negative ” – If the kids can understand that by the time they pass out, they are blessed.
I am glad I had good teachers, but being yours might have been legendary…
Hellfire, damnation and rhetoric (not to mention “bloody” in two places in the lessons) are what we deal with in 10th. Have you read “snake” – D H Lawrence’s? And Mark Antony’s speech, full of rhetoric; and Rime of the Ancient Mariner?
My teacher were way beyond legendary.
Lol. No, dont worry I’m not going to start here too. If, as you say, they can… I ‘d be stunned too, not to mention blessed
I was a science student till Pre Univ. II year (equivalent to Class XII). After one week of B.Sc. I switched over to ARts. Speaks for itself, my lecturers’ and my teachers’ inspiration
End of memoir quoting
I never switched streams but that made me all the more popular for word play all through college and PG. So no complaints. And no I havent read any of those. Have you just dished out home work to me ?
Only if you see it as such. You know you’ve got to decide who’s writing the comments. Teacher or… ?
A reading assignment is never considered too much work..
Have read the Mark Antony speech, realized when I googled it. Read the Rime too..
So gimme more
I scrolled down to ‘Leave a Reply’ but after going through the amusing teacher-student exchanges I started wondering: What was, 1. the post, 2. my comment?
Won’t let that prevent me from commenting. I went back all the way to re-read and to say:
Cute and simple poem. Happily ever after!
Thank you Bindu. Me and Usha have a history of commenting on and on. Glad you liked it.